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Lost-Chances
There's no such thing as a winnable war. It's a lie we don't believe any more.

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Posted by Lost-Chances - September 28th, 2008


I looked into the darkness, the only sign of light was a small ray of moonlight looking in from the outside. Using this moonlight, half a face appeared. It was a face I recognised but I don't know how. It's eye was average size but there was bag under it's eyes. It's nose almost large and his mouth appeared average. The only key features was a badly grown moustache. Half grown as though it belonged to someone who was barely into puberty but the face structured appeared too aged to be that. He had a beard that reached from his hair, around his head and onto his chin. More facial hair sat around his neck. It smiled and said "smile; smile like you mean it".

For some reason, I smiled. Almost with laughter as though the man told a humorous comment. The face then disappeared, the light grew over the entire room to show me that I was not in a room but rather on a rooftop. There was a black shadow on a nearby rooftop. It turned to reveal a little of his face. It was the man! He then started jumping building to building like as though he knew this route like the back of his hand. My god, so am I! I'm jumping heights that would usually leave me clinging onto an object in sheer fear. From roof-top to roof-top, the shadow's cloak waving at me in the wind as I follow. Finally, he drops.

I reach the roof top he dropped off, I jump down, grabbing a pole that came from the wall and then letting go. I land with a heavily into the street, the cloaked man disappearing into a black alleyway. The moon-light now drained through the gaps in the street tops. I ran after him, my feet landing lightly upon the dirt floor. I slid slightly as I turned into the ally, just in time for him to disappear into a house hold. Straight after I sprinted, running into the house to see no sign of him. It was a normal house to me with a heap on the floor I called bed, a wooden wardrobe, a stone sink and a table with a few wooden chairs with it. It was basic to me. I walked to the sink, placed the plug in and ran the cold water. After a while, I cupped the collected water and splashed it upon my face. Looking into the reflection as water dripped down, I saw the face sat upon a black cloak. I then felt a sharp pain. I fell back which he cradled me as I fell. He opened my black cloak to expose a leather sleeveless shirt. Grabbing my small blade, he threw it away. Then I saw it, it was a replica of my blade except his was coated with blood. My blood. He cradled my head and I looked at him. It was only now I realised who it was. It was me. Now, I smiled. Now, I meant it. At that moment, he jammed the dagger deep into my throat and darkness quickly swallowed me.


Comments

if you wrote 4 short stories that could be linked... would that make it a regulare story?

Yes. Although I don't see how I've written four short stories that could be linked.

Get a life you Newgrounds Nerd

GOD, MAYBE I SHOULD GROW THE FUCK UP WHILE I'M AT IT!

Comment.

Response.

DEATH CAB OF DOOM

BAH BAH DA DUM.

Quite a intriguing story there. How you doing?

I'm doing fine thanks. Having writers block mostly and using small bursts of imagination and motivation to write something. What about you?

Fart cum and apple sauce on my ass lips

Looks like this a job for Mr Scrubba!

I lol'd.

Haha, death dreams.

Overall the style of writing is very nice and definitely a strength of yours, however, the plot itself is quite confusing in places. Despite some confusing parts, I understood it slightly better the second time reading through and enjoyed it more.

Thank you. It was meant to be sort of dream-like story so it allowed a little lee-way to be a little confusing. Thanks about the compliment about my style of writing.