Thanks for the comments on my story. It's great to know that you and gum have similar criticisms and that you both liked my use of language. I feel that the confusion came from trying to fit a whole bizarre new world into a short story. Perhaps a longer story could have justified the events that transpired? Thanks anyway, your comments are much appreciated.
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It's really fine.
I think a longer story could of worked a lot better than a short story in your plot's case. Just because you were cramming a new and bizarre world in less than 4,000 words (if I remember rightly, that's the maximum word count).
wow I fail. 0.5 out of ten? I didnt even get a one
lol
Your story was unreadable. It was so poor and unenjoyable.
Thanks for the score :) When you get a moment I wouldnt mind a more in depth analysis of why you liked it, so I can contrast it with the other judges and improve my overall writing. Thanks again!
Well just throw me a PM and I'll go for it.
8.6, eh?
Boy am I glad I slipped you that 20 before you started judging! :D
Believe me when I say everyone is your friend in a pub if you have a 20 you're willing to share.
themanthelegend
Thanks for judging man, we all appreciate it. Next time I shall do better, let's hope there is a next time.
Lost-Chances
There likely will be a next time, I just highly doubt I'll be judging for the next competition.